Please read this SHORT script

please... any other opinions, suggestions etc?

Not bad.However,I would try and write a little more visualization into.you want the reader to really "see" it through his/her's minds eye.

<font color="#a62a2a" size="1">[ August 17, 2003 01:14 AM: Message edited by: seekaee ]</font>

Thanks... thing is though, it dosent have to be a good script form wise, as i'm directing it myself. But yeah, i guess your right.. its a fine line however between keeping it simple, and keeping it detailed

a little trick i picked up somewhere sometime. when typing the script in a screenplay format, every page (A4) generally lasts a minute on screen. although it depends on the pace, it's a good thing to consider